ENGL147 Week 5 | General English in English - Chamberlain university

Question 9 Which of the following represents the most effective “going from good to great” revision approach to the following sentence that appears in the middle of a paragraph and that uses source material? Original sentence: Howard (2020), notes that the communities most in need of nutrition education are those that need it most. Revised sentence(s): Howard notes that the communities most lacking in nutrition education are those that need it most. “It’s a sad situation” (2020, p. 34). Revised sentence: To further cement this imbalance between need and services, Howard (2020) notes that the communities most lacking in nutrition education are those that demonstrate the most ineffective nutrition practices. Revised sentence(s): Howard (2020) notes that the communities most in need of nutrition education are those that are least served. I agree with Howard because, as I noted in my thesis, we need to look at where the need lies and where it is not being met. Revised sentence: “These communities truly need it but are not being given it” (Howard, 2020).