ENGL147 Week 5 | General English in English - Chamberlain university

Question 9 Which of the following represents the most effective “going from good to great” revision approach to the following sentences that appear in the middle of a paragraph and that use source material? Original sentences: However, we should consider the source. “Dr. Sorangi is always on talk shows.” (p. 3) Revised sentence: However, we should consider the source. Dr. Sorangi’s political beliefs are, frankly, shocking and deplorable; therefore, we cannot give credence to her recommendations during this crisis, despite her decades of experience and success in working with infectious diseases. Revised sentence(s): However, Dr. Sorangi has made 102 talk-show appearances; Dr. Killem has made only 89. Therefore, we must weigh Dr. Sorangi’s opinions much more heavily. Revised sentence: However, we should consider the source; who in their right mind would consider a male doctor’s experience when talking about ovarian cancer? Revised sentence: However, decades of hands-on experience with infectious diseases make Dr. Sorangi’s assertions much more credible.